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BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #15 on: October 23, 2011, 04:24:12 AM »
BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series) -- CONTINUED

written by Laurie



Chapter the Fifth

(And shake me and my confidence
 About a great many things
 But I've been there I can see it cower
 Like a nervous magician waiting in the wings
 Of a bad play where the heroes are right
 And nobody thinks or expects too much)


Foxy was dancing on the bed of the pickup to Danzig’s She Rides when I got back to the group. The music blasted out of two huge speakers on either side of the truck. Foxy looked like she was having a great time as she gyrated, slithered and shimmied sensually to the music, using her long legs to their full advantage. Judging from the cheers, whistles, hoots and hollers of the crowd, which seemed to have doubled since I left, they were equally enjoying her performance. Melissa saw me and hurried over, a huge grin on her face.

“There you are! What took you so long?” Without waiting for an answer, she babbled on, as excited as she always used to get on Christmas morning. “Oh my god! You’ll never guess! I just made twenty-five bucks!” She held up a handful of wrinkled dollar bills as proof.

“Twen … What are you … Missy … You didn’t … “ I stammered.

“What? No! Yeesh! I was dancing! On the truck! Looked like fun so I went and did it! And they gave me twenty-five bucks! I think that’s the shit! Isn’t that the shit?”

“Yeah,” I grinned. “That’s the shit, all right. Now maybe you won’t be mooching off me for a while.”

“Well, let’s not get ridi-ca-lous.”

Foxy finished her dance with a flourish that resulted in thunderous applause and a lot of dollar bills for her to happily collect after she hopped off the truck bed. The impromptu dance show continued as, one by one, eager willing girls (and a few guys), filled with liquid courage, took turns strutting their stuff. Even Carole (surprise surprise) took a turn on the truck (it’s amazing the miracles that Budweiser performs!).  Kojak, who was acting as the unofficial DJ, selected Sister Christian as Carole’s song, which she didn’t find funny at all. But she danced anyway. I knew that sooner or later the finger of fate would point at me and I did my best to avoid the inevitable as long as I could…staying in the shadows, using my lack of height to keep out of view. But Kojak, with his trained policeman’s eye and his vantage point up on the truck bed, spotted me.

He hollered, “Yo, Peanut! Get up here and show us what you can do!”

(Shit.)

“Busted!” Mallory giggled.

“Shut up.”

The crowd took up the chant. “Peanut! Peanut! Peanut!”

(Double shit.)

“C’mon, Sissy, get up there!’ Melissa shoved me toward the truck. “It’s just dancing. We all did it, even Carole, for cripe’s sake!”

“I hate you.”

I grabbed Missy’s beer, took a quick swig (“Hey, watch the backwash, you!” she protested) and marched to the truck where Vegas Pete and Boche each grabbed an arm and hoisted me up easily onto the bed. Standing up there in my red tank top and daisy dukes, I self-consciously blinked out at the crowd, aware that all eyes were on me. I turn to look at Kojak who smiled reassuringly.

“Don’t worry, Peanut. I have a good one picked out for you.”

I took a quick breath, waited. From the speakers blared:

“Dirty, rotten, filthy, stinkin … “

(Oh holy crap on a cracker!)

“She’s my Cherry Pie
 Cool drink of water, such a sweet surprise
 Tastes so good, makes a grown man cry
 Sweet Cherry Pie … ”

As soon as the song started, I began swaying, not moving my feet which felt like they were frozen on the spot, just leaning my body side to side like I was balancing myself on the deck of a rocking boat in a storm. Then I thought, oh, to hell with it, just have fun! I closed my eyes and let the music wash through me, beginning to feel more comfortable, imagining I was at home listening to my stereo in my room, not out here in a field with hundreds of strangers in viewing distance. I started rocking to the music, letting myself, go, shaking my head, whipping my hair, kicking my legs, shimmying to the beat. I could hear the crowd cheering and I responded with a wink as I slid my forefinger into my mouth and sucked it before slowly pulling it out.

I was so caught up in my own little world that it took a while for me to realize someone was up on the truck bed dancing alongside me. Jonica. She gave me the same snarky smile as before and then turned her attention to the cheering onlookers. I knew right away what she was up to, showing me up. She gyrated, blew a kiss, bent over and began shaking her butt at the bikers who loved every minute of it. Someone else was enjoying it too. Boom-Boom was leaning on the truck bed, her dark eyes shining, a malicious smile on her pretty face.

“That’s it, Joni,” she crowed. “Show the bloody slag how it’s done!”

Fine, I can play that game too, I thought. I crowded Jonica, started aggressively bumping my hip into her. She stood her ground and gave me such a hard bump that I stumbled and almost fell out of the truck. I regained my balance and shoved her back. Our eyes locked, neither of us were smiling now. This was a test of wills. I was determined not to back down. Jonica and I continued to bump our bodies together, amazingly keeping in time to the music.

I slammed my hip into her leather-covered ass. Jonica had to grab the side of the truck. The crowd was whipped to a frenzy as I moved in to pitch her out. But Boom-Boom grabbed my ankle and Jonica hooked my other foot with hers. My arms flailed as I hurtled forward, out of the truck, landing hard in the grass and dirt. Melissa and Foxy rushed to me as I scrambled back up to my feet. Mallory and Carole stood, frozen in wide-eyed shock. My eyes filled with angry tears, more embarrassed than hurt, my fists clenched, watching Jonica smile, wave and play up to the cheering crowd.

Sensing trouble, Kojak killed the music. Boche and Vegas Pete approached the truck, ready to prevent a fight. Needless to say, they were the minority. Just about everyone else was itching for violence. Including me.

“What the hell was that all about?” I hissed at Jonica as she lightly hopped down from the truck bed.

“No offense, sweetie. You looked like you were lost up there,” she replied with a shrug and a smile. “Just trying to help you out.”

“Thanks for nothing,” I muttered.

From somewhere in the shadows, Tiny’s drunken bellow: “Kick her ass, Peanut!”  Followed by a loud long belch.

I took a small step forward. Jonica stood her ground, spread her feet, looked me right in the eyes in total seriousness and said in a low voice that only those of us close to her could hear, “You don’t REALLY want to try anything, do you?”

I took another step toward her. Missy grabbed my shoulder, Foxy held tight to my arm. Boche and Vegas Pete inched closer.

(this is crazy this is crazy this is crazy this is crazy)

A few tense seconds passed. Felt like an hour. I shrugged myself free from their grasp. My gaze never left Jonica’s.

Another time, my eyes told hers.

I’ll be ready, her eyes answered back.

I started to turn away. Everyone relaxed. Crisis over. But then …

“No, I didn’t think so, chere.”

I whirled back, lunged at Jonica. She was caught off-guard by the unexpected quickness of my move and the hard slap to her face that followed rocked her head and sent her stumbling back into Boom-Boom, who managed to catch her before she fell. Vegas Pete and Boche grabbed me before I could continue my attack and Kojak jumped off the truck, positioning himself in front of Jonica to block her from coming after me.

In a loud voice, Boche declared, “All right! That’s enough! This ends right now, yes?”

The crowd did not like that at all. Oh, no, they definitely did not. A chorus of boos and a few scattered “Fuck, no! Let them fight!” chants filled the air.

Vegas Pete’s grip on my wrist was so tight I couldn’t have fought even if I wanted to. And part of me did. The bitch embarrassed me in front of a bunch of people. It made no difference that I would never see most of them ever again after tonight. They were here. They saw her do it. That’s enough. Even as these thoughts swirled through my brain, I heard Melissa’s voice in my ear.

“I’m so sorry I got you into this, Sissy.”

That did it. That was enough to stop me. All that anger, all that frustration, gone. My body relaxed. I knew my sister would blame herself if anything bad happened.

“It’s okay, Missy,” I reassured her. “I’m not gonna fight.” I turned to Vegas Pete. “I’m fine, Pete. Really. No more trouble from me.”

Foxy chimed in, “I believe her, Pete.”

Vegas Pete looked at Boche, then they both looked at me. At Foxy who nodded. At Missy’s frightened face. Back at me. Then, at the same time, they both let go. Melissa breathed a relieved sigh as we turned and moved away from the truck.  

Boom-Boom let out a hooting laugh. “Don’t go away mad, slag! Just go away!”

Boche whirled on her. “Ta Gueule! Shut your mouth, Boom-Boom!”

Boom-Boom turned to him. “Don’t you start with me, Frenchy! You’ll regret it, yeah?”

Boche replied in a quiet but firm voice. “Let it be, Boom-Boom. It’s over.”

The angry girl opened her mouth to reply but Jonica’s hand on her arm stopped her. The two of them walked off into the shadows.

Kojak, in his best cop voice, said, “Okay, everyone. Show’s over. Let’s break it up, huh? Get back to some fun.”

Bummed out that the expected fight never happened, some of the crowd went to drown their disappointment with more Bud. Others crawled into tents and onto blankets to let off some steam in other ways. Kojak climbed back on the truck and started the music up again. But the Buffalo Chip Dance Show was over for the night.

“Laurie, were you really going to fight?” Carole asked as soon as we joined the others.

“Of course she was!” Mallory insisted. “The bitch was asking for a beatdown!”

(stop it stop it stop it stop it stop it)

“Laurie? Really?”

“Huh? Really what, Carole?”

“You were REALLY gonna fight her?”

“I don’t know. Yeah. Maybe. I guess.” I turned to Mal. “Can I have the keys again? I’m gonna head back to the Airstream, maybe lay down for a little bit.”

“You want me to come with you?” Missy asked as Mallory handed me the keys.

“No, Sissy, you stay here and have fun,” I smiled to reassure her. “I’ll be fine. I swear. I just want to lay down.”

Her look was still doubtful. But she finally grinned.

“I’ll leave the door unlocked in case I zonk out.” I turned to Foxy. “Thank you for backing me up.”

“Hey, no problem,” the blonde smiled.

In a quieter voice, I continued, “I need a favor. Please keep an eye on my sister. In case those two psychos come back and start up some more of their shit. Get her out of here fast.”

Foxy nodded. “You got it.”

“Thanks.”

I gave Boche and Vegas Pete a little wave. Boche waved back, Pete winked, then they both watched me walk off into the night, turning back to the party only after I had disappeared from sight.


*****TO BE CONTINUED*****

« Last Edit: October 23, 2011, 07:09:31 AM by Laurie Breeze »
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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #16 on: October 24, 2011, 07:05:41 AM »
WHEW.... :o  Sweetie, i felt like i was right there, for real.....i think i'm gonna camp out tonight here at Freecats,and wait for the next part ! ;D ;D ;D....  you know how to draw us into the story,and keep us glued to it, AWESOME !  :-* :-* :-* :-* :-*

    (Just sayin ;) )

Thanks, Sweetie!  huggggzzzzz    Hope you really didn't camp out here, or if ya did, you had plenty of marshmallows 'n chocolate for S'mores!

Sorry there was no chapter today, got caught up in some stuff. The next chapter will be up 'n running sometime tomorrow afternoon!

:-* :-* :-* :-* :-*

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #17 on: October 24, 2011, 08:21:48 AM »
Laurie
we are looking forward to the next chapter

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #18 on: October 25, 2011, 02:11:32 AM »
I give Joanne a half tray of homemade lasagne , italian salad and home made strawberry cheesecake.  Also 6 bottles of bottled water.

pete

Mmmmm, sounds yummy, Pete! Got any more? Writers get hungry too, ya know!   :) ;) :-*

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #19 on: October 25, 2011, 02:17:08 AM »
BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series) -- CONTINUED

written by Laurie


Chapter the Sixth

(But you
 Why you wanna give me a run-around
 Is it a sure-fire way to speed things up
 When all it does is slow me down)


After I got back to the Airstream, I took off my tank top and daisy dukes, turned on the tap and splashed some cold water on my face. I was starting to calm down again. Maybe laying down for a little while would be a good idea. I pulled on my Augustana t-shirt, climbed the ladder up to the sleeping area above the cab and closed my eyes. I must have dozed off, I don’t know for how long. I heard loud pounding, then a door being pulled open.

(whafuck?)

I was starting to open my eyes when a pair of hands roughly grabbed me by the shirt and an angry voice screamed close to my ear.

“YOU ARE FUCKING DEAD, YOU PSYCHO BITCH!”

I was pulled down off the bed and hit the floor with a painful thud.

(whaFUCK???)

Completely awake now, I saw Jonica, her face red and twisted in rage, standing over me. She kicked me in the side really hard and I pulled away from her before she could do it again. But she quickly grabbed me by the hair and yanked me up to my feet. Crying out from the stinging pain, I flailed at her with my fists. My punches forced her to let go of my hair and I straightened up, glaring at her. Her eyes were wide, flashing. Her chest heaved under her white halter. Her entire body was tense, like a viper ready to strike.

“Me psych bitch?! ME PSYCHO BITCH??? What the fuck is your problem?!” I yelled.

“Don’t give me that ‘Little Miss Innocent Shit’! You know damn well what my problem is!”

“Yeah! You’re a psycho lunatic! NOW GET THE FUCK OUTTA HERE BEFORE I THROW YOU OUT!”

“Oh, I’ll leave,” Jonica snarled as she suddenly grabbed my hair again. “But you’re coming with me!”

I charged into her as she began to pull me to the door. We both flew out of the Airstream, landing in a tangled heap of flailing arms and legs on the grass and gravel. Jonica released my hair and wrapped her arm around my neck, squeezing hard. I dug my nails deep into her wrist and drove my other elbow hard into her tummy until she let go. We both scrambled away from each other and rose to our knees.

“Did the slag admit what she did?” came a voice from the shadows.

Boom-Boom. Watching. There was no smirk or smile on her face now. She gave me a look like she was convinced I was guilty of every crime committed since the dawn of time. Even though I was mad as hell, I knew I had to try to stay rational.

“I don’t want any more trouble from the two of you,” I said in what I hoped was a reasonable voice. I looked at Jonica. “What happened in there,” I pointed at the Airstream, “I’ll let that slide. You’re pissed about something. I wish I knew what it was.”

“You wanna know what she’s pissed about, slut? You really wanna know, yeah? Take a look at THAT!”

Boom-Boom pointed an accusing finger down to the right rear tire of Jonica’s Winnebago. Even to my untrained eye, the tire definitely looked like a murder victim. One clue for my brilliant observation was that it was entirely flat, the rim kissing the gravel. Another clue was the small stainless steel hunting knife that had been plunged deep into it. I was shocked. Speechless. I stared at the stabbed flat tire. The steel handle of the knife glinted in the moonlight.

(Looks like a CSI crime scene. Somebody should be along any minute now to take fingerprints and check for DNA.)

“Proud of your handiwork, huh?” Jonica’s voice, boiling with anger, brought me back to now.

The realization dawned on me. They think I’m the tire killer! I turned to face her. “I -- You don’t think I -- Now, hold on a minute, “ I stammered. “I did NOT do this, I swear to God I didn’t!”

Boom-Boom wasn’t buying it. (What a shock!) “Don’t try to lie your way out of this, yeah? We know you did it, bitch.”

Ignoring Boom-Boom, I kept my eyes on Jonica. Trying to get her to believe I was telling the truth.  “Look. Okay, we had our problems tonight. But I would NEVER do anything like that.”

“Bullshit,” Boom-Boom snapped. “You did it, cxnt. And you’re gonna pay for it.”

“That’s right,” Jonica hissed. “One way or the other. You’ll fucking pay for this.”

I threw my hands up in disgust. “I give up. It’s like talking into a dead phone. I’m outta here.”

I turned to go back into the Airstream. Big mistake. Jonica speared me from behind and I hit the gravel again, facedown with her on my back. A little stunned and winded from the impact, I still had enough presence of mind to buck up hard, throwing her partway off me. It was enough for me to scoot back and shove her away. Breathing hard, with tiny specks of gravel on my face and tummy (my Augustana tee had ridden up, exposing my red panties), I launched myself at Jonica. She clutched at me as our bodies smacked together and we started rolling around again, both of us trying to get an advantage, neither of us able to. Like I said, we are both about the same size, she’s maybe an inch taller (5’2” to my 5’1”) and we both are about 115 pounds.

I knew I could be in big trouble. Not only was a raging Cajun trying to beat the shit out of me, I had that crazy psycho Boom-Boom ready to wade in and join the fight any time she wanted. But right now she seemed content with just standing there cheering Jonica on.

“That’s the way, babes! Kick her fucking arse!”

It’s amazing how fast people show up when a fight starts. You could swear the two of you were alone, that no one else was within miles, but just make a grab for her hair and a crowd gathers. Like the mysterious voice in that same Kevin Costner baseball movie, “If you pull it, they will come.” (I’m talking about HAIR now, people! Get your minds out of the gutter, thank you!) Like sharks sensing blood in the water, gawkers just seem to materialize out of thin air within seconds. Or maybe they just happen to be in the right place at the right time. Whatever. As Jonica and I rolled around, slapping, pinching, scratching, hair-yanking, squealing, moaning, I became aware of voices other than Boom-Boom’s.

“HOLY SHIT! CATFIGHT!”

“HOO-WHEE! GUD-DAMN!”

“RIP HER CLOTHES OFF!”

“BOOBIES! WE WANT BOOBIES!”

“OH HELL YEAH! SHOW US YOUR TITS!”

Then hands suddenly pulling us apart. I thought maybe it was the cops, breaking us up. (Terrific! Now I’m gonna spend the night in jail, thanks to the bitch!) But, to my surprise, the guys weren’t wearing uniforms. Unless you count black leather and denim the unofficial ‘official’ uniforms of bikers everywhere. (Bikers? Breaking up a catfight??? Somebody better call Ripley’s!) The two bikers kept a tight grip on Jonica and I, knowing we’d fly right back at each other, given the chance. They each walked us a safe distance from each other, then tried to engage us in brilliant conversation.

My guy, Hungry Eyes by name, broke the ice by saying, “Geez, you two were really going at it. You must really hate each other, huh?”

My eyes were glued on Jonica’s back, as the other biker (I found out later they call him Pocket Rocket…I don’t want to know why, I REALLY do not want to know why) was most likely trying to impress her with his equally charming repartee.

“Figured that out all by yourself?”

“Yeah, I’m good that way.” Hungry Eyes laughed, then he got right down to business. “If you two wanna go at it, I say more power to ya, y’know? I’m just saying there might be a way we can ALL benefit from the situation.”

I looked at him. “What do you mean?”

“Just this. How’d you like to make yourself some money tonight?”

“Money? What are you talking about?!”

“You wanna kick her ass, right?”

“Well, du-uh.”

“Why not kick her ass AND take home a nice chunk of cash at the same time?”

I stole a quick glance back at Jonica. Pocket Rocket had his hand on her shoulder, probably giving her the same sales pitch. I turned back to Hungry Eyes.

“Keep talking.”

“You two can fight right now till one of you either gives up or can’t continue. The winner wins, the loser gets her ass kicked, it’s all over, nobody has anything to show for it, except some bruises.”

“And satisfaction.”

He continued, “Yeah. But that and a buck can’t even buy you a cup of coffee anymore.”

I had to nod. “You’re right about that.”

Hungry Eyes smiled. He must have suspected I was nibbling at the bait. Now all he had to do was hook me and reel me in. He pressed on, “Or…you two can agree to fight it out later, say, in about an hour. In front of a crowd who’d love the entertainment and pay for it too. In case you haven’t noticed, we can be pretty generous. I think I can guarantee the winner a nice payday.”

I’d already seen how generous these bikers could be. Missy getting twenty-five bucks just for dancing to one song. (“Isn’t that the shit?”) I glanced over at Jonica. She was staring at me. Boom-Boom was by her side with Pocket Rocket. Boom-Boom was yipping away, nodding her head. Pocket Rocket was grinning, grateful for the help, I guess.

Apparently Jonica didn’t need much convincing. Neither did I. Still looking at each other, we both nodded at the same time. After giving each other a quick thumbs-up, Hungry Eyes told me the details while Pocket Rocket did the same to Jonica.

Absolutely no contact with each other till the fight. We each wait in our campers till someone comes for us. Catfight. Not NHB but as extreme as we want to go. In bikinis. Barefoot. Till there was a clear winner. The winner gets the prize money, the loser gets…nothing.

I kept nodding as he droned on. My brain registered maybe one out of every ten words. I would have agreed to anything if it meant getting my hands on that Cajun slut. And soon….in one hour…I’m gonna get that chance. And, by god, I’m gonna make the most of it. That bitch Jonica will suffer. Trust me.


*****TO BE CONTINUED*****


(Next chapter.....THE FIGHT!)




« Last Edit: October 25, 2011, 02:22:22 AM by Laurie Breeze »
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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #20 on: October 25, 2011, 02:52:41 AM »
wonderfully done with a great set-up for what's to come. Great work, Laurie and Joni! :)
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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #21 on: October 25, 2011, 06:18:36 AM »
wonderfully done with a great set-up for what's to come. Great work, Laurie and Joni! :)

Thanks, Howard!  :-* :-* :-*  So glad you 'n everyone are enjoying the story. This part is mine, Joni is writing the second story about our next confrontation!  ;)

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #22 on: October 25, 2011, 04:21:04 PM »
Hey thanks for including me in the crowd ;)

Great build up, can't wait to see the fight.
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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #23 on: October 25, 2011, 06:02:34 PM »
when I first started writing here I I told myself I would always be honest when I leave a comment. And as much as it pains me to say this the truth is I don't like this story Laurie. I didn't like it at all. I adored it! and it pains me to say this because it's not fair that your first story should be so damn good! lol you fucking rocked this shit babes! the characters are full and rich, each scene is laid out to perfection with incredible detail leading the reader to picture the moment vividly in their head but masterfully you skip the line where description becomes a bore, you paint the picture with enough colour and life that not for a single moment does it become dull!

And emotions? WOW! they were intense at parts! I think we ALL could sense that trepidation when you had to dance on that truck! well... except Jo, she'd dance anywhere if you promised her five bucks and a bud, the dirty tramp :P (love you really foxy! haha ;D)

And finally.... Boom Boom? there's something about that character that I really like ;D

MORE!!! MORE!!!! I can't wait any longer!!!!

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PS. why the fuck did it take you so long to write your first story when you're THIS good! haha!
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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #24 on: October 25, 2011, 09:36:38 PM »
Hey thanks for including me in the crowd ;)

Great build up, can't wait to see the fight.

Red, I was wondering if you would catch that!  ;)   :-*

You just may pop up again, ya never know!

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #25 on: October 25, 2011, 10:07:15 PM »
when I first started writing here I I told myself I would always be honest when I leave a comment. And as much as it pains me to say this the truth is I don't like this story Laurie. I didn't like it at all. I adored it! and it pains me to say this because it's not fair that your first story should be so damn good! lol you fucking rocked this shit babes! the characters are full and rich, each scene is laid out to perfection with incredible detail leading the reader to picture the moment vividly in their head but masterfully you skip the line where description becomes a bore, you paint the picture with enough colour and life that not for a single moment does it become dull!

And emotions? WOW! they were intense at parts! I think we ALL could sense that trepidation when you had to dance on that truck! well... except Jo, she'd dance anywhere if you promised her five bucks and a bud, the dirty tramp :P (love you really foxy! haha ;D)

And finally.... Boom Boom? there's something about that character that I really like ;D

MORE!!! MORE!!!! I can't wait any longer!!!!

x G x

PS. why the fuck did it take you so long to write your first story when you're THIS good! haha!

Thank you so much, G!  :-* :-* :-* :-* :-*

I wrote a LOT when I was in school, writing was always something I loved. But then I became a nanny well, the only stories I've written or told in the past few years were all very G-rated, Disney Channel material   ;D

It took me a long time to build up the courage to write again for other adult eyes. Small contributions to Howard's awesome UC2 series were a good start for me. I read all the stories you all wrote....You all inspired me 'n I learned a lot from the stories too. I'm darn lucky to have such awesome teachers! 

Then Joni suggested we work on this series together. She had faith in me, 'n gave me the ball to run with it. It's been a challenge but I'm loving every second of it!

Emotions, feelings 'n inner thoughts have always been a big part of what I write. I try to get inside my own head in every situation 'n yes I would be nervous as all hell dancing on a truck bed in front of a crowd of bikers  hehe  unless I had some liquid courage, LOTS of liquid courage!

Joanne? Well, I'll let the two of ya work out your, ummm, issues  ;)

You like Boom-Boom? Seriously? I HATE her!   ;D ;)

I'm working on the big fight now....it may take a day. But it's on the way!

LOVE YA BABES!!! (almost as much as I hate Boom-Boom!)

xoxoxo  :-* :-* :-*

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #26 on: October 25, 2011, 10:43:47 PM »
Hey thanks for including me in the crowd ;)

Great build up, can't wait to see the fight.

Red, I was wondering if you would catch that!  ;)   :-*

You just may pop up again, ya never know!

xoxo

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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #27 on: October 26, 2011, 10:28:36 PM »
I leave for Laurie Roasted chicken , mashed potates with brown gravy , salad with 3 dressings and a banana/chocoiate cheesecake.


pete

Thanks Pete! Sounds super yummy! I'll wait to eat it after the fight! I hope ya didn't do this to get me all full up so Joni will have an easy time beating me!  ;) ;)  What are the Vegas odds on the fight, 'Vegas' Pete? huggggzzzzzz  :-* :-* :-*


Hey thanks for including me in the crowd ;)

Great build up, can't wait to see the fight.

Red, I was wondering if you would catch that!  ;)   :-*

You just may pop up again, ya never know!

xoxo

~L~

Like a bad penny...
if your stories are all this good, I'd be honored to be tossed in :)

I think that can be arranged, Redman!  huggggzzzzz


Awesome sweetie, awesome !  ;D.............and yah, omg if Gemma wants to settle things, i'll gladly "show her" a thing or 2 ;)

 Can't wait for the finale sweetie, muahs !!!  ♥♥♥   :-* :-* :-*  ♥♥♥

Thanks Bestie!!! I'm working on the finale right now!  Ummmm, you're on your own with Gemma, sweetie, I have my hands full with Joni!  :) ;) ;D :-* :-* :-*

xoxoxo

~L~

  
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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #28 on: October 27, 2011, 04:13:10 AM »
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OMG!!!  How am I supposed to follow this?!?!  This is incredible, Laurie!  You are setting the bar incredibly high!  I can't wait to read the next part. 

J
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PS...Boom Boom?  lol
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Re: BLACK NIGHT IN THE BLACK HILLS (Part 1 of the Jonica vs Laurie Series)
« Reply #29 on: October 27, 2011, 03:09:42 PM »
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OMG!!!  How am I supposed to follow this?!?!  This is incredible, Laurie!  You are setting the bar incredibly high!  I can't wait to read the next part. 

J
xoxo

PS...Boom Boom?  lol

>:(  back at ya!

Joni, I've read your stories, you may be a Cajun bitch sometimes ;) but you're also an amazing awesome writer! I just know you can follow this without even breaking a sweat!!! If you buy the first round, we can set the bar as high or as low as ya want!  ;D

The final part should be done 'n up sometime tonight, unless there's a freak of nature or a rapture or I hit a writer's block at 90 miles per hour! But if everything goes the way I hope it does, it will be done tonight!

hugggzzz 'n xoxo

~L~
We're on a circuit of an Indian dream
We don't get old, we just get younger
When we're flying down the highway
Riding in our Indian Cars