Well, some mixed reactions... lots of praise but a few suggestions, too.
The artwork is great. Its good to see you take care to get some good, fluid poses ( not just half naked bodies, the care shows in the posing and attitudes of the characters), and brilliantly you did care as much about the backgrounds as you do the bodies. Highest marks, kudos to you.
The layouts I'd suggest need some tweaking to get a more cinematic feel. Look at a page of a comic book being produced today, or even some vintage stuff from Jack Kirby, Barry Smith, Neal Adams, Gil Kane. Look at the use of close ups and various sized panels. Every picture you have is the same sized box... why not vary that, use perhaps a tall thin panel, or a small tight box for a close up? Work for a more action movie feel with movement and high impact camera shots. Not sure if you can re-compose the existing panels, or maybe you can experiment going forward . I think that would make a good comic story a great one.
