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Swampland

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Swampland
« on: January 02, 2014, 05:13:44 PM »
Hello All,

This is a series I've been posting over on Sea King's site under a different name.  Thought I would start posting them here, since it was a thread on J.T. Edson's books on this forum that got me started on this series.



Swampland, Ch 1

By Kim

The flat-bottom boat slid between the buildings.  Overhead the sky was empty except for the sun.  Vines hung down from the dead facades of office buildings, the signage of cable companies and law firms baked off under the relentless heat.  The woman sitting in the boat’s only chair felt every ray of light, even through her sunglasses and hat and clothing.  She sat unmoving, her cool brown eyes gliding from building to building behind the glasses.  No one else would be out under the heat of the day, on the water downtown where the wind never brought its slight relief.  The men alongside her rowed the boat under what had been Interstate 4.  The woman stared at the exit signs for the Orlando airport and then flicked her eyes on.  The airports had been shut down for regular flights before she had been born.  The last smuggler had entered Orlando by plane when she had been a child.  He had been the woman’s father, and on his last flight he misjudged what had looked like a light storm and put his plane into the control tower.  The woman had not been to the airport since.

A snake eased past their boat, and on her direction her man shoved it away with the paddle.  It was the year 2235, and Orlando was now the southernmost point of the United Southern States.  In the same year the woman had been born, the United States of America divided itself into five separate countries; the travel requirements alone of one government stretching across an entire continent had been crippling.  The political divisions that had come with the full weight of global warming crushed it.  The USS was the poorest of these nations, and the smallest.  The few people still living in Orlando were nearly on their own, living under the limited scrutiny of their Mayor and the gator farms he controlled.  The city was partially underwater, the seawalls that had been built to hold back the Atlantic having been under designed, poorly built, and then completely abandoned once the USA came to an end.  The city’s citizens either worked for the sprawling gator farms that claimed what had once been the city’s theme parks or sold their limited goods or themselves to those workers and the workers’ owners.

The woman wiped the sweat from her forehead.  According to the phone she kept in her satchel, it was over 125 degrees and as humid as people could withstand.  Too much of her money went to the bribes to get her the satellite connection to keep the phone running, but it was an absolute requirement for the work.  She was wearing a cap, with her black hair hanging out the back, and long sleeves and pants.  From a distance, she and her men would be as non-descript as could make themselves, but they were relying on the fact that few people would even come to a window during the day in May.  At night, the people currently sleeping inside would be at their windows and on top of the buildings, working, partying, fighting.  During the daytime, the boat had the city nearly to itself.  In the bottom of the boat were a crate of batteries, boxes of little white pills, and a package containing a teddy bear for some little rich girl’s birthday.  Build into the underside of the boat was a special compartment for their most precious commodity, 100 gallons of gasoline.  Although the gasoline was technically hidden, the woman knew that anyone who stopped them would not be fooled.  The compartment was mostly for their safety in case of any shooting and a false sense of security.  The fact that made their smuggling operation most secure was that during the day the people most likely to spot them would either be in their pay, working for the people who paid them, or too smart to interfere with what was obviously a serious threesome.  In the city of Orlando, fully clothed people, on a boat with tarps over its bottom in the middle of the day—these were people not to be taken lightly.

When they reached the storage bay, the woman was the first one off the boat.  She nodded to the man guarding the entrance, and they all pulled the boat out of sight and into the dock they had fashioned. When they were done, the guard brought them fresh water and food and they ate inside, as far into the interior as they could get.  The recipients of the property would come at night to retrieve it.  None of them spoke in the two hours they rested.  When dusk came, the woman called for them to awaken and they prepped the boat to leave.  As the men pumped the gasoline into the tanks, the woman tipped a metal figurine of a soldier in her fingers.  Her father had been a pilot in a world running short of gasoline and the money to pay for things worth flying, and he risked the Atlantic crossing to run drugs from Brazil to New York.  On the flight over the ocean, as they tried to ride the edge of one of the many hurricanes, the girl had found the toy left over from another world as she huddled in a luggage rack at the rear of the plane.  Even as a little girl, begging for soup from her father’s former contacts in Orlando, where she had been stranded, she had seen that there was little future in the air or in transcontinental travel.

As the boat slid out of the storage bay, she took off her hat and sunglasses and washed her face and splashed water on her front of her shirt.  Her name was Cristina de Luca, and at 27 she had been in charge of her own operation for four years.  She was a stunning beauty with a gorgeous figure.  Her large, firm breasts strained at the material of her shirt without any bra, and her hips were just wider than being called athletic.  Her tight jeans showed off her strong, impressive lower body.  At 5-foot-7, with her body, she was on the boundary between being strong and powerful and being deeply feminine and alluring.  Her hair was long, black, and of loose curls, along with her skin like a very dark tan part of her heritage from the Mediterranean where she had been born.  The strap of her satchel cut a line between her breasts that would have caught the attention of anyone watching her.  She always carried on her face a look of intense concentration, and men and women both had learned to shield themselves against her intentions.  As the sun set and the first people were emerging onto the roofs of the tall buildings around them, she pulled her cap low over her face and resumed her captain’s seat.

It was night by the time they reached Cristina’s bar, the Lady Ace.  The bar, with her house on the back, was north of the city where the land was still dry, what had been called Winter Park.  She and her men arrived on horseback, the horses’ hooves sloshing through the muck that was the permanent state of the land.  At some point in the past, as the ocean crept up to the city from the south, men had filled in the hundreds of small lakes to the north.  The result was that all of the ground was wet, loose soil.  Her customers arrived on foot or hitched rides on the sleds that ran workers back and forth to the gator farms and the swamps.  It was a small bar with a desperate customer base.  Most of her income came from running goods and services for the Mayor and his allies.  Still, the brunette felt pride as she walked under the sign they had appropriated from an abandoned bar in the city, a slutty blonde holding a fan of playing cards in front of her enormous breasts.  Cristina returned the blonde’s flirtatious wink, as she always did entering the Lady Ace.

A tall, muscular man in his early 20’s was behind the bar.  His name was Ryan Pope, and he had taken over as bartender and bouncer a year ago, when an older man had reacted to Ryan’s accusation of cheating at poker with a knife, and left with the knife sticking out of his eye.  Ryan was pouring moonshine—the only drink most of her customers could afford—for a hopeless drunk.  From where he was standing, Cristina knew, he had within reach a scattergun and the last six shotgun shells they had for security at the bar.  Standing next to him was Lilah Green, Cristina’s assistant.  She was only 19, but she had proven herself a more than capable young woman.  She was in charge when Cristina was gone, but Cristina still worried about the teenager’s temper and her tendency to let her emotions govern her behavior.  She was a classic redhead, all fire and lust.  She was two inches shorter than Cristina, with a more moderate build, but she was athletic, fit and firm with strong arms and legs and nicely upturned breasts that Cristina admired in the girl’s skin-tight shirt.  She was wearing shorts that barely reached below her hips and the tight cheeks of her ass, and Cristina felt a burning desire for the redhead nearly as strong as her need for sleep. 

Rather than head off for bed, with or without Lilah, Cristina sat at the bar.  Ryan poured her a glass of real whiskey, and she felt better as the warmth spread through her chest.  “Glad to have you back, boss.”

Cristina tipped the glass toward him.  “Anything happen while I was away?”

“Threw Jebediah out again for trying to bum drinks.  We’ll need more ‘shine before the end of the week.”

“I don’t want that fucknugger in here again,” Cristina said.  “He’s costing us more business than he’s worth.  I’ll talk with Winter about getting some more ‘shine to hold us until the next shipment.”  Winter Sommerson was the Black man who controlled the flooded plains and islands to the north and the long wooden bridge that connected Orlando to solid land.  Cristina needed to talk with him about the next shipment.

“And Brandy Connor sent word with one of her girls that she wants to talk to you,” Ryan added.

Cristina sighed and finished her whiskey.  Brandy Connor managed The Swampland, the largest bar in Orlando.  It was on the road to the gator farms, and it catered to the farms’ foremen and bosses and the dreams of the field workers.  The Swampland had two rows of card tables and an entire wing of rooms for its professional women.  Brandy was a very curvy blonde, loud and showy, and she had been a thorn in Cristina’s side since she arrived in town six months ago. 

“What did she want?”

“Didn’t say.  Just said you were to report to her tonight.”  When Cristina looked up at him sharply, Ryan put his hands in front of his chest and added, “Her words, boss.”

Lilah sat down next to her.  “How are you feeling?” she asked, putting her hand on top of Cristina’s.

“Fucking tired,” she whispered.  Cristina wanted to rest her head on Lilah’s shoulder, but she couldn’t afford to look weak with strangers watching.  “I’m heading to bed.  You two are in charge for the night.”

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Cristina awoke late in the afternoon.  She was naked and drenched in sweat despite the fan whirling above their bed.  Ryan and Lilah both begged her not to waste the gasoline on the fan, but Cristina refused to give it up.  Ryan was naked beside her, with his arm draped across Cristina and his face pressed against the swell of her breast.  The boy was so handsome in the light coming in through the slats in the window.  Cristina watched him sleep and then she sent a direct message to Winter Sommerson asking for a meeting that night.  As she put the phone back in her satchel, Ryan stirred next to her.  Cristina told him to go back to sleep, but the bartender shook his head and rolled on top of her.  They kissed deeply, and then Ryan moved his attention to her breasts, kissing and suckling on her large brown nipples, and then ran his lips down Cristina’s flat stomach and then he was between her legs.  Cristina’s black hair was splayed out on the pillow, her back arching and falling in time with the boy’s tongue, and at the end she cried out once. 

Cristina went to meet Winter by herself, despite the protests of Lilah and Ryan.  She had her knife and she also took a long barrel shotgun and three shells.  She went on horseback, and after nearly an hour she found Winter and his escort at the shack he used for these meetings.  Cristina shook the older man’s hand and nodded at the two guards, both of whom were carrying military-class assault rifles.  Winter Sommerson had as much power as anyone in Orlando and as much money, although Mayor Barnwell and the other rich whites who lived in the remains of downtown would never allow someone as dark as Winter to live among them.  In his fifties, Winter now carried a decent gut, but one could see under the fat of old age the physically powerful and attractive man he had been in his youth.  Cristina doubted that Winter had been a man she would have wanted to tangle with when he was young, and she knew that he was someone she did not want to piss off now.

“Nice of you to come, Cristina.  Always nice to see such a pretty face.”

“Thank you, sir.  Always a pleasure to see you.  I’m sorry to see that Casey isn’t with you, though.” 

“I don’t believe that she wanted to see that whitebread slab of beef you’re running with these days,” Winter answered.  Cristina and his daughter Casey had been an item in the past, “batches” as people called it, and it had been Winter’s hope that the relationship would lead to Cristina’s taking over for him as he neared retirement.  But the relationship had ended as Cristina felt her inclinations shifting, and to Cristina’s great relief, Winter Sommerson was a professional who recognized personal choice. 

“I’m glad to be meeting in person like this,” Cristina said.  “I’d like to increase the gasoline and the pills we bring in.  I think there’s a market for it.  I’d also like to make a personal buy from you for some ammo, and maybe an upgrade in stock from whoever it is you’re getting your tools from,” she added, eyeing the gun carried by the man closest to her.
“I’m sorry that I have to be bringin’ you bad news like this,” Winter replied.  “You know that I like you, and we’ve had a good run of business here.”  He paused and wiped the sweat from his forehead.  All of them were suffering in the enclosed space, although it was nearly midnight and they had lived their entire lives in such conditions.  Winter took his name from the longstanding rumor that he had actual air conditioning in his heavily defended mansion in the swamp—from the rumor, and from the calculating attitude he brought to his work.  “I don’t know how it can keep getting hotter every year.  Not enough people can even afford the gas to keep putting more smoke in the air.”

“It’s a feedback loop.  We were locked into this decades ago.”  Winter gave her a puzzled look, and Cristina said, “After my dad died, they kept me in the library.  I found some working data pads and read a lot.” 

“Ain’t that a fucking kick in the teeth,” Winter said.  “As I was saying, we’re not going to be able to increase our business.  In fact, it’s going to be going down.  I’m sorry to say that I can’t let you bring any more gasoline or pills across.”

The Italian woman and Black man stood silent.  “You’ve made a deal with someone else”

“A certain party wanted to make my relationship with them exclusive.  I’m sorry.  If it’s any consolation, I’m parting with you on much nicer terms than they would have liked.”

That last comment got Cristina’s attention.  There was nothing to be done to change her situation with Winter, so they shook hands and departed the cabin.  On her ride back to the Lady Ace, Cristina wondered who this new smuggler could be.  Always possible for someone with a bigger wallet to want to cut everyone else out of the business, but to want her to be hurt specifically was strange.  A lot of people didn’t care for her, but she had always been careful with to maintain relationships with other people in the business.  And then she thought of the message Brandy Connor had sent the previous night for her to “report” to her, and it all made sense.  Brandy had arrived in town on a boat from Charleston and, by means of her stunning looks and her hard fists, she dealt with the other girls at The Swampland and established herself as the woman in charge.  She had never sold her body, at least in this town, and she presented herself as a tough businesswoman in a tough business, one that just happened to rely on her looks as well as her will because it was in customer service.  She had gone out of her way to antagonize Cristina, cutting into the business at the Lady Ace and dragging her name through the mud whenever she could.  A month ago the two had nearly come to blows after Cristina had heard of Brandy’s saying that the Lady Ace would have done better business had it been run by a “real woman and not some half-batch who dresses like a man and makes her boy toy get his hands dirty for her.”  Cristina had gone to The Swampland to settle things, but she had been too angry to throw aside her knife and Brandy refused to meet her using weapons.

Cristina rode first to the Lady Ace, where she planned to change horses.  Even in the middle of the night, the heat and the soft ground had been hard on the big bay she was on.  She needed a drink as well.  As she threw the door open, though, she found an unusual sight:  An Asian woman standing in the middle of the bar, getting ready to arm wrestle with Ryan.  The crowd was gathered around them both, betting and cheering, but just as Lilah was going to yell for the start, the Asian woman leaned over kissed Ryan on the lips and then in his surprise and using both of her arms she pinned his down.  She leapt into the air with her hands overhead, a big smile on her face until she saw Cristina staring at them.  When Ryan saw his boss, he clambered to his feet, wiping the Asian girl’s kiss from his lips.

“We were just playing around, boss,” he stuttered.  “She was bragging about how strong she is, and one thing led to another, and you know,” he finished with a shrug.

“Nice of you to keep my employees entertained for me,” Cristina said to the Asian girl.  “But I thought that I had trained them better than to let some little girl get them distracted like her obvious theatrics.   But when your face is so … typical, I guess theatrics is the way to go.”

The girl was eyeing her hard, and Cristina knew that she was more than some fool’s date for the night or a small-time thief working the camps.  The girl was Chinese, she could see now, and extremely pretty too.  She was a few inches shorter than Cristina, and smaller in the chest and lower body, but she still had an impressive bust and an athletic figure.  Cristina could tell from the way the girl was standing that she had experience in handling herself.  Her straight black hair hung down to her shoulders.  The girl was wearing jeans and a low cut t-shirt that showed off the inner swell of her breasts well.  She wore no bra, like all of the women who lived there.  Cristina was also wearing jeans that flattered her legs and her shapely hips and ass, more round and likely more powerful than the Chinese woman’s.  Her breasts strained the front of her shirt, the neckline of which she had cut into a deep V with a knife to allow for the space she required.  The Chinese woman had softer features than Cristina, charming and pretty to the bar owner’s stark beauty, but in the eyes of both women one could see what people there referred to as “sand.”

“I take it you’re Cristina, owner of this scatpile?”

“I am.”

“My name’s Selina Hu.  I’m new around here, and we haven’t met.  But I work at The Swampland, for Ms. Connor.”

“Ms. Connor?” Cristina asked with a sharp laugh.

“Yes.  She employees me to take care of things for her.  Last night, she sent one of her girls here to ask you to meet with her to talk business.  You did not, even though you arrived from your little errand with plenty of time left in the evening.  So now, Ms. Connor has sent me to bring you back for the meeting.”

“Oh she has, has she?” Cristina asked.  The bar’s patrons had by this point stepped to a more cautious distance.  Bullets were scarce in Orlando, but both women were wearing long knives stuck in their waistbands.

“Yes.  But first I think I’m going to teach you some manners.”

“You’re welcome to try, bitch,” Cristina answered.

“I’m going to do so whether you welcome me or not.”  With that, Selina slowly removed the knife from her belt and handed it to Ryan, and Cristina did the same.  “If you’ll follow me outside,” she invited, and Cristina and the crowd followed her.  In the street, the two women faced off some ten meters apart.  The bar’s customers, with Ryan and Lilah among them, were along the wooden sidewalk.  “After I beat that smug face of yours for a while, I’ll be taking you back to The Swampland with me.  Ms. Connor said that so long as I didn’t permanently damage the goods, I could do as I liked.  She still hopes to make a proper working girl out of you, although I suspect the cause might be lost.”

“After I kick this girl’s ass up and down the street, we’ll have drinks on the house to celebrate.  And then I might just go do the same to your sorca of a boss, too,” Cristina added. 

They came together quickly.  Cristina threw a wild right that Selina ducked under, and then the smaller woman hit her in the stomach and the side.  As Cristina lowered her elbows to protect herself, Selina slapped her across the face.  She pressed Cristina, hitting her in the face and torso with short crisp slaps, and the larger woman grabbed her around the neck and the shoulders.  The two women wrestled like that, back and forth across the street, until Selina got her foot between Cristina’s legs and tripped her.  But as they fell Cristina wrenched her to the side bodily so that they landed in the muck atop the smaller woman.  The two of them fell to rolling back and forth, but the fall had stunned Selina and soon Cristina had her stuck to the ground.  She had her arm locked around Selina’s head, and she punched her in the side and in the face.  The smaller woman kicked her with her heels in the thighs, but to no effect.  Then she grabbed onto Cristina’s enormous bust through her shirt and squeezed.  The angle was not good, but the pain still persuaded Cristina to let go of the hold and roll away from her.

The two women came to their feet and were immediately on each other.  Selina punched her in the stomach but Cristina hit her across the face with a solid shot, and as her opponent stumbled she seized hold of her by her black hair.  She flung the Chinese woman to the ground and kicked her in the back, and then she flung herself upon her.  Their flesh smacked together and they lay thigh to thigh, face to face, breast to breast, pulling hair and rolling over each other.  Selina got atop her at last and like a minx sat on her waist.  She slapped Cristina across the face, twice, stunning her, and then she ripped open her shirt in one quick move.  Before she could do anything else Cristina rolled her off.  The remains of her shirt swung open, and the crowd could see her breasts swaying freely beneath her as she tried to get astride the smaller woman.  Selina got free of her and to her knees, but as she rose Cristina grabbed her by the back of the shirt, tearing the material as the woman wrenched away from her.
The two women were standing and facing each other.  The first round was over, and they look each other over.  Cristina made a kiss at her and then she pulled her ruined shirt off and tossed it aside.  Selina did the same.  Cristina’s breasts swung back and forth as they moved, much larger than Selina’s, and she saw the Chinese woman eyeing them.  Cristina felt and moved every inch a majestic woman, like a panther, but her opponent was a lynx, stepping lightly over the ground, her smaller, firm breasts reduced in their swaying and her pretty face taking in every bit of Cristina’s feminine power.  Both women were breathing hard, and rivers of sweat ran down their faces and their exposed chests.  Eyes locked with desire and bitterness, and they rushed each other again.

Selina and Cristina hit each other in the face and the stomach and then grabbed hold of hair with both hands.  They bent each other over at the waist, pulling and struggling and turning in circles.  They threw uppercuts to the gut and chest.  Both women moaned and gasped for air.  At some point Selina stumbled to one knee and the Italian smuggler was on her, kicking her in the side and in the thigh, but they were too close and the kicks had little effect.  Selina let go of the hair to try to swing a fist at the beautiful dark face, but Cristina saw it coming and hopped back, letting go her own hair pull.  Selina tried to get to her feet, but the other woman rushed her and knocked her to the ground.  Selina managed to throw the larger woman past her, and before Cristina could get up Selina was on top of her.  She put one of her jean-clad thighs and part of her ass across Cristina’s neck and face, and the other leg on Cristina’s arm, trapping it.  Cristina reached up for her breast with her free arm, but Selina seized it.  Then she started pounding her first into Cristina’s flat stomach, gaining a grunt of pain with each blow.  After that she sank her fingers into Cristina’s impressive assets, kneading the female flesh and pinching her brown nipples.  Cristina would have howled in pain had she the oxygen.  The sweat was running from Selina’s face and arms and torso down onto her.  In one last surge the bottom woman used her greater weight to buck the other off of her.

Cristina struggled to her feet, but her opponent was in better shape than she and was there first.  Selina struck her across the face, with a right and a left and another right, hard slaps that would have put down most women.  Cristina took them and slugged Selina in the stomach with all she had left.  The blow landed clean, and it drained Selina.  The Chinese brawler fell to her knees, clutching at her stomach, eyes wide, and then Cristina slapped her across the face with a blow that put them both down in the muck.  They lay like that for what felt to both fighters an eternity, sucking in oxygen, dreading the sound of the other woman rising.  At last they both got to their knees and then threw themselves together.  Breast to breast they struggled, pulling hair and beating on each other’s sides and backs.  Then Selina hit her in the stomach, weakening Cristina and forcing her onto her back.  They rolled in the dirt again, the messy substance now smeared together with their sweat and covering both women as if it were a symbol of their desperation.  They pulled hair, slapped faces, squeezed breasts. 

When they rolled clear of each other this time, all knew that the end was near.  The women staggered toward each other.  Selina hit her in the face and in the breast, the fist going in deep.  Cristina gasped in pain and threw a punch that missed.  Selina hit her in the stomach, and then as Cristina went to grab her the smaller woman sidestepped.  As Cristina stumbled forward her opponent threw herself on her back, locking her legs around her waist and her forearm around her neck.  Their two faces were frozen in that one instant side by side, alluring as they were locked together in their fight.  Cristina was down on her knees and then in the dirt before she could react or think to fall backward onto the other woman.  Selina squeezed with everything that she had, scissoring her thighs around Cristina’s flat waist and choking her around the neck.  Desperate, she pulled at the arm and at the legs alternately, but to no avail.  And then Selina grabbed her breast again.  Cristina could not move and could not free herself, and she sobbed out that she yielded.  Selina let loose of her and sat up, looking as if she would then take Cristina to The Swampland as she had promised, but then she fell back into the muck alongside her.  Winner and loser lay together in the street, gasping for air, the one staring up at the night sky and the other face d

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Re: Swampland
« Reply #1 on: January 02, 2014, 05:14:50 PM »
Swampland, Ch 2

By Kim

Lilah Green watched over her boss’s bar, the Lady Ace, while her boss, Cristina de Luca, recuperated in her bedroom off the back.  Cristina had become entangled with some form of nastiness with Brandy Connor, the woman who ran the largest bar in Orlando.  Lilah was smart and by general acknowledgment she would be running her own operation one day.  She was only 19, though, and she knew that she had a tendency to react before thinking.  With auburn hair that spilled from her head in a mess of curls, and a tight athletic body with firm, moderate breasts that she enjoyed showing off and a personality that lit up the entire bar, Lilah was accustomed to being the center of attention from men and women, personal and professional.  The previous night she had watched her boss fight in the street with a woman Lilah had allowed into the bar as a customer and who had turned out to be the new employee of Brandy Connor.  It had been a fair fight and Brandy’s woman had beaten Cristina, but at the end both women were spent, lying in the street topless and battered.  Lilah had the men take Cristina to her bed and Selina, the Chinese woman, to her own boss’s hangout.

Dr. Eason checked on Cristina and declared that she needed a few days of bed rest and solid food.  No broken bones, no permanent damage to her face.  Eason was a thin old man with a patchy white beard, a doctor who was willing to trade his services for whiskey or gasoline.  He brought his wife and nurse Talia with him.  Of mixed South Asian and German descent, with a very curvy profile on a 5’4 frame, she was the high point of his visits to the Lady Ace.  She was also the woman who controlled the flow of information through Orlando’s slums, the bars and workers’ hovels where they spent most of their lives.  The bar’s early customers all said their hellos, asking Talia how she was doing and why she never came when her husband treated heat stroke and missing digits for the workers in the gator farms.  She was wearing a white dress that showed the outlines of her stunning features, the fabric wet with sweat, and all of the men in the bar took in her looks.  She and the Dr. lived well, too.  Few people knew much about medicine any more, and as a young man Eason had restored some old med school tablets and taught himself enough to keep a business together.

Late in the night, Lilah told Ryan to watch the bar and slipped away.  She was wearing shorts that showed off her legs and a shirt that put her to good effect.  A few men and women both gave her appreciative looks, and she smiled in return.  At the wreckage of what had once been a football stadium, she found a handmade shack and, after four sharp knocks on the door, she stepped inside.   The air smelled like rot and softness.  In the darkness Lilah could see a man lying on a straw mattress.  The disgust rose up in her stomach, and she put one hand near the knife in the small of her back as she flicked on her flashlight with the other.  Working flashlights were rare, and it marked her as a young woman with connections. 

“Turn that fucking light off,” the man on the floor said.

“You tell me what I want to know, and I can be your friend.  Don’t tell me what I want to know, and I’ll cut your little peter in half.  Longwise.”  The shack’s occupant groaned.  “Did you to that bar tonight?  Did you see anything?”

“Saw that new girl get brought in.  Looked like she had been run over by a wagon and drowned.  Saw she got some real nice legs, too,” he added with a giggle.

“You need to be respectful, fucknugger.”

“Okay, okay.  I did overhear her and Brandy talking.  Brandy was pretty pissed off that that girl didn’t bring Cristina back with her, but she seemed pretty happy when the girl told her that she had beaten up your boss.”  Lilah could hear his smiling.  “Then Brandy told that new girl that when she was healed up she would be sending her to meet with Winter.”

“The fuck you say?”

“That was it, I promise.  Now pay me what you owe me.  I’ve given you plenty.”

Lilah counted out four pills and tossed them onto the floor and walked back to the Lady Ace.  Near dawn, as Ryan was chasing the last drunken customers out the door and the cleaning girl was starting to mop the floors, Lilah went into Cristina’s rooms.  The smuggler’s beautiful face was bruised and swollen, and she winced as she sat up on Lilah’s entering the room.  Cristina had pushed the sheets down off of her in the heat, and Lilah could see the bruises on her arms, torso, breasts against her olive-colored skin.  She gave Cristina a glass of water and sat next to her on the bed.

“How you feelin’, boss?”

“Tell me what you’ve found out tonight.”

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A week after her boss’s fight against Selina Hu, Lilah set out by herself.  Cristina had learned from a man who owed them favors that someone was bringing a canoe of whiskey and knives across the swamp.  Lilah was to find the load and discover who was in charge of it.  She left the bar as the sun went down.  She was wearing jeans and a long-sleeved shirt to protect her arms and legs, her curly red hair pulled back in a ponytail.  Strands of loose hair stuck to her face and neck in her sweat.  In the small of her back was a pistol with one clip and on the waist of her jeans was a knife.  Before she left the camp, she stopped to say good-bye to Tara, the woman who owned the store down the street from the Lady Ace.  Lilah had started seeing her about a month previous.

Tara was leaning on the counter.  She wore a loose dress, her light brown hair on her shoulders and in front of her face.  She was very pretty, a few years older than Lilah, and curvy under her dress in a way that Lilah enjoyed.  Lilah walked up and kissed her before saying hello.  “You look like you’re on your way to work,” Tara told her.

“And you look beautiful enough that I don’t want to go.”

“But you have to.”

“These snorts are trying to double fuck us,” Lilah said.  She let her shoulder lean into Tara’s.  No one else was in the store.  The shelves were half-empty if she were being generous.  “And I’m to make sure that we double fuck them first.”

“You go have fun with that, honey.  And you tell them that no one but me gets to double fuck you.”

With another kiss and a grab on her ass, Lilah left Tara’s store.  She hiked through the swamp, rats scurrying away from her and branches poking her arms, legs, torso.  It felt as if the hot air was pressing down on her chest from above.  She had been running with Cristina for nearly a year.  On her first job, they had gone out on the open water in all three of their flatboats to meet a ship that had come up down from Charleston with what had promised to be a major load of antibiotics.  Lilah had been the first to see the con coming and the one who got their boats out from under the ship’s guns and safely back into the swamp.  From that point she had been Cristina’s tenente.  Lilah’s parents ran a store of their own up in Tallahassee, but she had left them when she turned 17 without a look back.  If they wanted to sit in an empty room and get high all day, they could do so just as easily without her.

Her source had given her two possible routes the crew might use.  After some thinking, Lilah chose the one that seemed the less likely and climbed up into an oak tree.  The moss dangling low from its limbs would hide her well enough.  The sky was clear, and she sat staring up into the stars as she ate from a bag of carrots and bit of chicken she had brought with her.  They had money set aside to last a decent bit, but it was the goods that would be a problem, not running out of money.  If they weren’t the ones bringing stuff in, then they were at the mercy of fucking chance just as bad as their customers.  As she sat in the crook of the tree waiting a boa came sliding down.  She waited until the snake was on the limb near her foot and then with her boot sent it down into the muck below.  After another two hours, she hopped down out of the tree.  There was a cabin not far off this route, and upon adjusting her ponytail she began her walk.

The cabin was a one room shack at the edge of one of the interconnected lakes.  There were lights in the windows.  Lilah snuck up under it and saw inside four Black men with rifles and shotguns, standing around a large pile of crates.  Their run, Lilah knew, and bigger than anything she had run with Cristina.  It was unusual for Winter’s men to bring a run this far toward Orlando.  Their new business partner must have more pull and more muscle.  And not a lot of trust, judging from the number of guns.  Lilah pivoted on her heels to move away to find a Black woman standing in front of her.  “Hello there, Lilah,” Casey said to her.  She was Winter’s young, very capable daughter.  She was taller than Lilah, with strong arms and legs and a deep, firm chest under her white t-shirt.

Casey took her gun and knife and directed Lilah into.  “Seems like you all have decided to expand your horizons.  Moved on to some exciting new ventures.”

“I don’t think that I’d call it exciting, particularly.  It’s just more work for me.”

“Too bad I can’t say the same.”

“Yeah, too bad,” Casey replied.  “Suppose that’s why you’re out here.  Redheads, always gotta make things complicated.”

“You didn’t have to cut us out like this.”

“No, we didn’t.  But then from another way of looking at it, we did.  It’s the way of fucking things.”

There were lights outside the cabin, and Casey met a bearded man at the door.  It was one of Brandy Connor’s men.  “I see you’ve brought a guest,” he said, looking at Lilah.  “Unless your father has changed his hiring practices.”

“She’s our business, not yours.”

“Any chance she could be thrown into the delivery?  You could put it on our account,” the bearded man suggested.

As Casey turned to look at Lilah, a flash of lights came on outside the cabin.  Over a bullhorn, a man’s voice said, “All you fucknuggers put your guns down and come outside.  No need to make this worse than it is.”

It was the Orlando sheriff’s department.  They enforced what passed for law in the city, which worked in some combination of what was best for the mayor, what was best for the sheriffs, and what was best for the people.  Although most of what they brought into Orlando was not sold to the people who lived in the camps, the vast bulk of the area’s population, Lilah doubted that hijacking the shipment was in their best interest, either. 

“Don’t suppose these are friends of yours?” Casey asked.

“Not exactly my type.  Is there a secret tunnel out of this cabin?”

“I’ll bring it up at the next meeting.”

Casey, her men, Lilah, and Brandy Connor’s man slowly exited the cabin, hands up.  Outside were seven men in brown uniforms, shotguns ready.  The man with the bullhorn ordered them to throw their weapons.  He was tall and heavy, with a thick beard.  Terrell Lane, Sheriff of Orlando.  He was chewing on an unlit cigar.  He motioned for one of his men to take the weapons.  “Sorry to see you caught up with this sorry lot, Lilah,” he said.  “Heard you all were gettin’ out of this business.”

“And it looks like you’re getting into it,” the redhead replied.

“Why don’t you keep your fucking white camp mouth shut,” said a female voice.  Out from behind Sheriff Lane stepped his chief deputy, Megan Dormer.  She was a nasty woman who had what seemed like a personal grudge against Lilah, Cristina, Brandy, and any other woman she considered to be beneath herself.  Her face had a stern sort of beauty to it, and she had a sleek, athletic build and light brown hair, and she carried herself with a swagger that seemed directed at every other woman she met.  Everyone saw her as the sheriff’s bag handler, a woman who relied on her looks rather than her abilities and who would never be able to run her own crew.  There were rumors that she had grown up in a well-off family out West and that she had fled to Florida.

“Why don’t you come over here and make me,” Lilah replied.  “If your boss will let you get your ass kicked in front of all your men.”

“Don’t you worry about him.  I’d be happy to beat your ass here in front of everyone.”

“Both of you shut the fuck up,” Lane barked.  “Get them chained up and get those boxes loaded on the sled.  I’m not standing out here all fucking night watching you two swipe at each other.”

 As one of the deputies stooped to get the chains, a voice yelled from the trees for all of them to freeze.  A deputy fired his shotgun toward the voice, and a series of shots were returned.  Lilah dashed around the corner of the cabin and dove into the water.  She was across the water and on a slip of land, watching from behind a tree, by the time the two groups had sorted themselves.  It was the rest of Brandy Connor’s men who had started the shooting, she knew, trying to free their boss.  Their new boss was lying face down next to one of the sheriff’s lanterns, and even if he were still alive, Lilah knew that he would be allowed to bleed out.  She could see at least one of Casey’s men down, too, and two of Lane’s men.  It looked to her like Brandy’s men had started a fight they couldn’t handle; unless they had a secret supply of bullets, they had no chance of standing up to the sheriffs.  Casey and the rest of her men had gotten away, at least.  Lilah couldn’t feel any ill over a business decision.  She certainly could feel ill for a personal grudge, though, and she waited until the shooting had been settled and saw clearly that Megan had survived unhurt.  It was always the worst people who came through in the best shape, she thought as she started her long, hot trek home.

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As Lilah made her way back from the cabin, Cristina was putting on a new dress.  She had taken it some months ago from a shipment.  The man who had ordered it for his mistress had no longer required it, and Cristina kept it in her trunk rather than toss it for reasons she could not quite have explained.  Before his crash, her father had raised her by himself and she had never developed an affinity for feminine trappings.  But Brandy’s taunting of her “masculine ways” had run through her head since the fight with Brandy’s woman Selina Hu more than she liked.  The dress was black with green lines around the waist and bust, and it was cut very low in the chest so that it showed off Cristina’s impressive build quite well.  And she thought that her waist and hips were put to good effect  too.  One last look in the mirror, and she pushed her hair back over her bare shoulders and left for The Swampland.

The Swampland was large, well lit, and busy.  Men were drinking by the bar that dominated the north wall as Brandy’s women encouraged them, and men and women both played poker, craps, and roulette.  Professional women leaned against the wall near the doorway to the part of the bar where their “customer” rooms and Brandy’s office and apartment were located.  The bar was hot despite the screen-covered windows on both ends, and Cristina could feel the air settling into her lungs.  Real candles flickered in the chandeliers overhead and on the walls.  Two of Brandy’s women passed by as she came to the bar, giving her scathing looks, neither of them as attractive in the face or body as Cristina or their own boss.  Cristina saw one of the security men spot her and go to notify Brandy.  She ordered a whiskey from the bartender, who looked her over with an appreciative gaze, and winking at him she took her shot and waited for the boss lady to appear.

“Well look who fell into a change of clothes,” Brandy said in a loud voice as she approached.  “Change the clothes, change the woman.”  The statuesque blonde seemed to be pouring out of her blue dress.  Her breasts seemed even larger than Cristina’s and better presented by the deep cut of her front, and her wide hips and powerful legs were evident under the strained material.  Her curly blonde hair spilled down over her shoulder and seemed to cup her face, which was beautiful but with its blue eyes and full cheeks was the opposite type of beauty to Cristina’s.  She wore a gold necklace that was draped across the imposing swell of her cleavage.  “You like the necklace?” Brandy asked, when Cristina had looked her up and down.  “It’s a shame that you don’t have a man who can afford to give you something like that,” she added, giving Cristina’s dress, face, body the same scrutiny the Italian had given her.

“Yes, it’s too bad that you can’t afford to buy your own arrow to get men to stare at your cow tits.”

“Oh my goodness,” Brandy responded.  “Listen up everybody, Cristina de Luca here is going to lecture me about having good business sense.  Tell us about how your little scatpile of a bar is doing for you, Cristina.  Or perhaps you’d like to tell us about your other business ventures?”

Cristina tensed herself, but Brandy checked her with a tilt of her head to the security men by the door.  “Now, now,” Brandy cautioned her.  “This isn’t the kind of establishment where we settle our disagreements with a mindless brawl.  So tacky.  Come with me, and we’ll hash this out like proper ladies.”

Brandy turned and walked toward her office, and Cristina followed her.  A guard stationed in the hallway checked Brandy for weapons.  The room was large and spare, with a large desk stationed across the far corner, facing the door, and chairs arranged before it.  A Republic of Texas flag was on the wall behind the desk, its fabric rippling slightly from the two ceiling fans whirling overhead.  Brandy poured a whiskey for each of them and the two women drank standing in the center of the room.  When the glasses were empty they set them on the desk and stood eyeing each other.  Without a knock, Selina Hu entered the room and closing the door behind her blocked the exit.  She was wearing a blouse buttoned halfway up and a loose blue skirt that stopped above her knees.  Her feminine athleticism showed clearly through the thin material.  She smiled at Cristina.

“Whatever you came here to talk about you can say in front of her,” Brandy explained.  “She’s involved in all of my operations.”

“Afraid to be alone with me after the shit that you’ve pulled?”

“Hardly.  From what I heard of your last meeting with Selina, I don’t have much to fear from you.  Disappointing, but that’s the way of the world.”

“If you like, I can kick your ass again.  Embarrass you in front of our customers just like I did in front of yours,” Selina offered.

“You’re welcome to try, little girl,” Cristina answered her.

“As enticing a prospect as that fucking is, I have other work to get to tonight.  Why did you come here, bitch?”

Cristina turned her attention back to Brandy.  “I wanted you to hear this from me.  I know you’re trying to muscle me out, and it’s not going to work.”

“Oh, it already has, honey.  You’re just too stupid to notice it,” Selina said.

“Stay out of this,” Brandy said to her.  “Cristina, it would be best for everyone if you accept what’s happening.  I have more people with me and more money behind me than you’ll ever be able to deal with.  And aside from that, the fact is that Selina isn’t wrong.  I’ve already outmaneuvered you.  I made deals with the right people without your even noticing.  Our first shipment has already come in, and it’s more weight than you could ever move.  So it would be for the best if you and all of your people if you just peacefully step aside.  You’re out of your league with me, in every possible way.  Maybe you should go find a less competitive place for you to do business in.  I hear that Lower Alabama’s nice this time of year.”

“You’ve overplayed your hand, Texas.  You’re incompetent and you can’t be trusted, and people are going to find that out.  The reputation you’ve made for yourself running this whorehouse won’t do you any favors in my line of work.  It’s going to take more than two oversized heifers and bad hair to get rid of me.”

“No, it’s just going to take me,” Selina said.  “Meeting’s over, dusky.  Time for you to go,” she added, taking hold of Cristina by the arm and pulling her toward the door.

“No need for violence, Selina.  I’m sure that Cristina is a sharp enough woman to know how to find the door out of a whorehouse.”

“I doubt that she could find a bed in a whorehouse with both hands and a flaccid dick in her mouth.”

Selina was still holding Cristina by the arm, and the two women stared into each other’s eyes.  In that moment before they went for each other Cristina could see the beads of sweat on Selina’s forehead and down into her chest.  It was on her own face and upper body as well.  Both women were breathing hard.  “Are you going to interfere?” Cristina asked Brandy.

“Wouldn’t dream of it.”

Cristina wrenched her arm free of the other girl’s grasp and shoved her away.  Selina took hold of the front of her dress as she did, so that the material ripped loose from her torso.  Cristina rushed after her and slapped her across the face, but Selina came back with a fist into her stomach and then taking hold as Cristina bent over she slung her into the wall.  Cristina hit the wood face first, her bare breasts flattening out.  Selina hit her in the small of her back with quick shots and then pulled back on her head, still holding on to her long, dark hair.  “I’m going to run you out in that bar naked.  Let everyone get a good look at that body of yours they’re always talking about,” Selina said into her ear.  Then she tore away the rest of Cristina’s dress.  A thought flashed through Cristina’s mind:  The material came off easily for its expense for the intended mistress.

The thought was out of her head as quickly as it came.  She whipped her elbow around and caught Selina in the temple.  The smaller woman stumbled back and then fell on her ass, dazed.  Cristina wanted to throw herself on her, but as she rid herself of the dress and shoes her opponent was already gaining her feet.  Cristina was wearing only a pair of black panties.  Selina kicked off her shoes, and Cristina made a “come on” motion with her hand.  Smirking, Selina slid her blouse off her shoulders and her dress to the floor and threw both aside.  She was wearing light blue panties.  Cristina stared at her body, lithe and strong except her full breasts, and she thought of their last fight and how she wanted to punish her, throw her around the room, make her insignificant and low.

The two women rushed each other.  They collided chest to chest, arms scrabbling at torsos and pulling hair.  The two women pirouetted around the room, a beautiful dance of female violence.  Brandy stepped out of their path and locked the door.  Cristina punched Selina in the side and with a rush of strength propelled her across the room.  Selina hit against the desk and Cristina bent her backwards onto it.  She had the Chinese woman flat on her back and she tried to climb on top of her but Selina rolled her off.  Cristina landed hard on the floor and as she was getting up Selina crashed into her.  At first she was underneath the other woman, but before any damage could be done she rolled her off and jammed her in the corner.  Selina was on her side, her back to the wall, and working on her knees Cristina pinned her in place.  She thudded fists into the young woman’s side, stomach, breasts and held her down by her hair with the other.  Selina tried to get free but Cristina got her leg on one of her arms, trapping it.  Now Selina started thrashing under her, pushing and hitting at Cristina’s voluptuous breasts and flat stomach.  With a snarl Cristina reached between Selina’s legs and pinched her sex.

With a burst of energy Selina got some space between them and then kicked Cristina away from her.  She managed to get to her feet but Cristina was there first.  “You’re going to pay that, you fucking slut.”

“Come do something about it.”

Selina ran toward her, burying her shoulder in Cristina’s gut.  But Cristina was too large and Selina too weakened for the smaller woman to move, and she drove her elbow down into Selina’s back, again and again, until the other woman was on her knees.  Cristina pulled her back by the hair, holding her in place in front of her, and slapped her forehand and backhand.  Then she rode the girl onto her back and mounted her, sitting aside her stomach.  Selina tried to push herself free, and Cristina enjoyed seeing the panic come into her eyes.  She slapped her across the face, Selina’s black hair whipping with the movement and sweat flying off her skin.  Both women were sucking air into and out of their bodies; the sound was flat and hard in the room and Cristina’s breasts rose and fell with the effort.  She brought her hand back again but before she could strike Selina got her hands up and latched onto her heaving breasts.  She sunk her fingers into the mounds of female flesh, squeezing with the energy and strength Cristina had felt on their first fight.  In her rush to get the hands off her chest Cristina lost her balance, and Selina got out from under her.

The two topless women, skin shining and beautiful faces half covered in hair were an embodiment of female combative spirit.  Each willed herself to her feet.  They came together but as Selina charged forward again she was slow and the larger woman punched her in the stomach and then slapped her across the face.  Cristina then seized her by the shoulders and ran her into the wall.  Her face and bust hit hard against the wood, and Cristina pulled her back by the hair and slammed her forward again and then a third time.  After the last, holding her in place by the hair and a firm grip on one arm, Cristina asked, “I thought you were going to make me pay?  Kick my ass again?  Haul me naked in front of all those ugly men and stupid whores downstairs?”  Selina could only gasp for air in response, her face flush against the hard wood.  “Didn’t hear you,” Cristina said, and hit her in the back as a prompt.  Selina groaned.

With a surge of strength Cristina yanked her away from the wall and sent her stumbling over the desk and to the floor behind it.  She followed the Asian woman around the desk, expecting for her to be rising as she did.  But instead she found Selina lying on her back, staring up at the ceiling.  When she saw Cristina coming toward her she moaned and turned her head away.  Eager to continue beating on her, Cristina rushed in.  But the girl had been shamming, and when Cristina got close both her feet came up and struck her full in the chest.  Cristina she fell back into the desk and then to the floor, holding her breasts.  She gasped for air and watched as Selina rolled onto her hands and knees and crawled toward her.  The sweat was dripping off her torso and breasts and the hair dangling about her face.  Their eyes locked again, as they had in that instant before the fight started.

Selina landed on her with a thud.  The women took hold of each other’ hair once more, pulling all they could.  Cristina rolled to her side but was only on top an instant before Selina regained it.  Their shapely thighs, lean torsos, imposing breasts rubbed together bodily in their struggle.  With a burst of movement neither would have thought possible at this stage Selina moved to sit on top of her, but Cristina got her hips outside of hers and wrapped her legs around her torso.  She squeezed with all that she had.  Selina gripped her breasts, pinching down into the flesh, but despite the agony Cristina held on.  She yanked Selina’s head back by the hair and began pounding her in the face.  After enduring all she could, Selina let go of the breasts and tried to protect herself.  But then Cristina slapped her breasts until she exposed her face again.  No matter what she did, Selina could not extricate herself from the scissors Cristina had around her torso and the pounding she was giving her. 

Selina gasped that she had had enough.  Cristina loosened her scissor hold and rolled on top of her.  Sitting astride Selina’s chest, she held her head up by the hair and with her fist raised, she demanded that Selina admit that she was beaten.  “Fuck you, bitch!” Selina said with all the force she could muster.

Cristina saw Brandy coming toward her, expecting that she would start mashing the helpless woman for her answer.  But Cristina laughed and patted the woman she had beaten on the cheek and slowly rose from her.  “You gonna be trouble now?” she asked Brandy.

“Not now,” the buxom blonde answered.  “For now, I’ll give you a change of clothes and an escort home.  And when you’re up to it, we’ll continue our discussion of my taking your business from you.”

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Re: Swampland
« Reply #2 on: January 02, 2014, 08:32:54 PM »
Great erotic writing ... especially the 1st one ... keep it up!  ;D ;)
Proudly butch and living as a 'man'. In this catfight fantasy there are no losers, and in the end all should be winners!

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Re: Swampland
« Reply #3 on: January 03, 2014, 03:04:17 PM »
Kim is the best writer on Seakings.  Check out Kim vs Carla in Florida Women 10.

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Re: Swampland
« Reply #4 on: January 04, 2014, 01:46:20 AM »
Kim,
this is an excellent story, the setting alone takes the story a long way above the ordinary and it is well imagined and vividly sustained. Your opening paragraph seizes the reader's attention and the writing from there on continues at that high standard.

Your characters too are vividly drawn and believable.

Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

I look forward to many more stories set in the steamy world of Florida a few centuries hence

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« Reply #5 on: January 04, 2014, 03:12:46 AM »
Great Story. I love the story line and the characters. Looking forward to the rest of the story. This has potential for being a great series.

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Re: Swampland
« Reply #6 on: January 05, 2014, 04:42:42 AM »
What is your nome de Guerrero on Seaking's site? Thanks!

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« Reply #7 on: January 05, 2014, 08:40:43 AM »

Great story. I enjoyed it immensely. Looking forward to more!
« Last Edit: January 05, 2014, 08:58:35 AM by WJohn »

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« Reply #8 on: January 05, 2014, 04:43:37 PM »
Thanks for the feedback everyone!  I'm glad that people are enjoying the stories.

What is your nome de Guerrero on Seaking's site? Thanks!

Kim.  And I started a new series as Leila (a continuation of the first series), but honestly I felt like the steam was running out of that one.  It's unfinished as of right now.

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« Reply #9 on: January 05, 2014, 06:22:17 PM »
I, for one, loved Leila's parking garage fight.

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« Reply #10 on: January 05, 2014, 07:19:53 PM »
Loved the story. I liked the post-Global Warming time frame; the Florida swampland setting; the attractive women; and, the fact that, when they threw down, they fought like women without benefit of weapons or martial arts skills.

Given the introductory set-up, I was a little surprised that Christina took a beating in her first fight especially by a smaller woman. 

When it was apparent that the Chinese woman would be an antagonist and that they would fight, I said ‘Oh No! Not another karate-chopping, high licking martial arts fight.’ So, I was pleasantly surprised to see that the fight incorporated some good old fashioned catfighting with hair pulling, fisticuffs, wrestling, and boob grabbing without an excess of blood, disfigurement or permanent injury.  A little bit of bloodletting from a busted nose, punch in the mouth, etc. is certainly within the limited of such a fight, as is a swollen face, black eye, or a myriad of bruises.  Your description certainly fits how I would envision such a fight in those future times when martial arts schools were not around the corner.  In fact, your fight descriptions are similar to the J.T. Edson fights that are the ‘may the best woman win’ type fights – just hairpulling, fist fighting, rough and tumble ass kicking.

I also appreciated the fact that it was a ‘fair fight’, as Lilah described it, and that there was no interference where there could have been once Lilah realized that her boss was taking a good beating.  This made Christina’s loss all the more embarrassing.  I like a fight that goes to a natural ending without interference. While I would have loved to see the redhead eventually get into it with the similar-sized Selina, I am sure that they will sort things out in the future.

I did not expect Selina to beat the crap out of Christina on her home turf; however, the unpredicted outcome made the story more interesting – shit happens.  I was happy to see Selina redeem herself but it was apparent that the pretty Chinese woman had her on the ropes several times once again; it was obviously not over between them. Not sure how Christina is going to fare against the alleged tougher Brandy.

You describe a lot of characters that should make for quite an excellent ongoing storyline. Personally, I would like to see more sex in the stories (don’t we all?).  In Chapter 1, most of the females characters are described as having diverse interest, so I was surprised that Selina, as exhausted as she appeared, was not given the opportunity to recover enough to claim and enjoy the fruits of very public victory.  She would have really established her reputation if she had stripped Christina naked and then, straddling her waist, slapped her face and big boobs back and forth with impunity or, perhaps, at the very least, she could have slowly crawled over and mounted Christina and lift her arm in victory as she pushed Christina’s face in the mud.  Ideally, a nice face sit would have be very appropriate after such a hard battle.

Lastly, you descriptions of the ladies are great.  We have a pretty good idea of height; Christine is 5’7”; Lilah is couple inches shorty (5’5”?) and Selina is several inches shorty (5’4” etc.) but knowing their weight helps in fantasizing the fight, as does knowing the size of their breasts. While bras were too uncomfortable to wear in the hot and humid future; perhaps, having Christina breast size described as filling a X Cup bra, on the rare occasional when she wore one, could have served as a good benchmark for other comparisons.

If you are going to continue this as a series, as I hope you are.  I believe that some artistic renderings (volunteered from FCF board members.) would enhance the stories even more.

I hope I have not rambled on too much but I do want you to know that I enjoyed your story and appreciated the obvious efforts that you have put into it.  Great Job and I hope to read more of your story in the near future.

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« Reply #11 on: January 05, 2014, 10:32:47 PM »
For some of the female characters, I do have a specific model/actress in mind as far as what they look like.  Not especially famous ones, but from the internet.  I don't know if people want me to post them or not.  It might be too much from behind the curtain?

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« Reply #12 on: January 05, 2014, 10:56:45 PM »
Oh my, what an excellent read!  A finely detailed story-line....clearly defined characters..and both exciting and highly entertaining!!

Thank You!!

I can't wait to read more!!

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« Reply #13 on: January 06, 2014, 01:49:44 AM »
For some of the female characters, I do have a specific model/actress in mind as far as what they look like.  Not especially famous ones, but from the internet.  I don't know if people want me to post them or not.  It might be too much from behind the curtain?

Maybe other readers will chime in let you know if pictures or references would be at good augment to enjoying your story even more. Thanks for your response.

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« Reply #14 on: January 06, 2014, 02:31:43 PM »
I'd like pictures