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My First Story Erza Scarlet VS Emily ( A Bit Short And One Sided )

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Offline Auron

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This is my first story, I am not the best writer I tired my best and edited it as best I could. Any feedback is welcome thanks.

Emily loved to watch MMA since she was only 14 years old. She just turned 18 a few days ago; she hears about a women's club in her city where they do MMA style fighting. She wanted to join; she puts on pink T-shirt and jeans and walks to the gym. Emily enters the gym and sees a red-headed woman wearing a white tank top and blue shorts. Emily saying to herself "I will ask her how to join and maybe ask her as well to show me around"  Emily walks over the lady "excuse me miss I would like to join this gym"

The lady smiles at Emily "Hello there; my name is Erza. I am happy to see a new face around here, in order to join we need to see how strong you are then you will have to speak to my boss"

Emily smiles back "Nice to meet you Erza; my name is Emily and sure thing I will be happy to take you on"

Alright then please follow me to the pit where we do our matches" Erza says escorting Emily to the put area. They make their way to the pit area, around the pit area, are lockers and also a room with a few showers. The pit is something like a giant circle. Ezra opens up a locker and hands Emily some black fingerless gloves "Put these on Emily since we don't have any extra uniforms your outfit will do just fine"

Emily says, " Can I just fight in my bra and panties then?  Would it be easier right?

Erza says blushing a bit "Sure if you want to, once you're done please go into the pit.

Emily strips down to her pink bra and panties and enters the pit; Erza follows her shortly afterward. Erza laughs " you sure love pink"

Emily smiles "I sure do" Emily opens up with a slow jab but Erza quickly dodges her slow attack and follows up with an uppercut. Emily falls over on her butt; Erza pushes her to the floor pinning her down punching her repeatedly in the face. Emily already starts bleeding from her nose and lip; Emily is in a lot of pain, but she yells out "Stop"

Erza gets off of Emily and looks down at her bloody face, do you give up Emily; you tried that's what matters the most to me"

Emily says, "Yes I give up"

Erza turns around to leave the pit; Emily stands up once more and hits Erza in the back of her head. Erza turns back around with anger in her eyes "you are a stupid bitch; I will make you pay for that" Erza kicks Emily hard in the gut, Emily falls backward on her ass once again, instead of pushing Emily down, she kicks her in the head. Emily got the winded kicked out of her from that one.
Erza begins to climb on top of Emily again repeatedly hitting her in the face till her lip, and nose bleeds even more.

Emily starts to cry "Stop please" Erza rips off Emily's bra and panties as she kicks her again in the head. Emily is now knocked out with a face full of blood. Erza leaves the pit.

Part two????

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Offline vals

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Re: My First Story Erza Scarlet VS Emily ( A Bit Short And One Sided )
« Reply #1 on: October 12, 2017, 07:07:12 AM »
Good little story.

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Offline dfoulup

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Re: My First Story Erza Scarlet VS Emily ( A Bit Short And One Sided )
« Reply #2 on: October 16, 2017, 12:42:20 AM »
Skip the second part; the first was painful enough.

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Offline LindsayKO

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Re: My First Story Erza Scarlet VS Emily ( A Bit Short And One Sided )
« Reply #3 on: October 16, 2017, 03:06:51 AM »
Skip the second part; the first was painful enough.

That's rude as fuck, people get better through practice. It's not like you have to read it.

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Offline unholly

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Re: My First Story Erza Scarlet VS Emily ( A Bit Short And One Sided )
« Reply #4 on: October 16, 2017, 03:47:01 AM »
Shows promise.  Erza is your avatar but you never described Emily other than what she was wearing.  I would have liked more detail so I could have visualized better,  but then that is my style, not everyone's .

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Offline Auron

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Re: My First Story Erza Scarlet VS Emily ( A Bit Short And One Sided )
« Reply #5 on: October 16, 2017, 04:05:16 AM »
Sorry to hear you didn't like it dfoulup I will be sure to write better next time. And unholly thanks for your feedback, in part two I will be sure to get into more detail about Emily, or I edit this one and repost again.

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Offline jondo53

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Re: My First Story Erza Scarlet VS Emily ( A Bit Short And One Sided )
« Reply #6 on: August 29, 2019, 08:08:55 PM »
I liked it. One-sided fights are the best!